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Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Dear all...am delighted I got you by surprise.This is indeed getting more and more into me. I have a hundred and thousand ideas so you had better hold on to your bonnets.
Hangnhu...You call me evil? The story is called A Naughty Star...what else can you expect?

Lacy..I love all your introspection! I wish I could have more time to write all the ideas that come to my mind.
Thanks for taking the time to comment. It is a caress to my soul!
Your questions will be answered soon, ladies. Chapter 17 and 18 are already written. They just need polishing...

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Malena
I can't help thinking that she probably wished herself back into Bingley the same time he wished himself back to Lizzy, and now she is Bingley again hense the Col see's Bingley.

I also cannot help wondering why the Rich Darcy, Bingley and Fitzwilliam would be sharing a bed in the first place?

I can't wait for Ch 17 & 18
Geri

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

My dear Geri,
I think I have said, in chapter 15, that they had been caught by an unexpected snow storm , as many other travallers must, hence the scarcity of rooms
Thanks for posting a comment, dearest. I love the thoughful reader

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

forgive my harsh assessment Malena, I was too surprised initially, now thinking about it, a very naughty star indeed. lets hope she leaves no lasting damage to either party.

I take it Elizabeth & Bingley have truly swap back, what uproars shall be at Longbourn? Though Mrs Bennet would be in euphoria for her five thousand a year son in law. But Mr Bennet is missing his favourite daughter, and dear Jane must be wondering what happen to her dear sister.

Darcy, he saw Elizabeth in his dream, no more disturbing ones of Bingley, phew, must be very relieved.

anyway, come back soon, update either stories, I love them both

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

This story is brilliant!
Thank you so much!!!!!!!!
Kim

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Hanghnu,
Promise you will soon see the light.
Kim, thanks for your comment. Am glad you're enjoying it!

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

i most certainly did not expect this...
haha, i cannot wait for more of the story, as well as the scene in longbourn if bingley is caught on the same bed with jane
jumping with excitement...thanks malena!

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Chapter 17 is up, my dears. It seems impossible, but the story gets funnier still!

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

oh dear oh dear
poor Bingley, poor Elizabeth, those two need to be near each other, in case anything happens. The colonel holding Elizabeth through the night? Why, why Malena.
I can't decide to laugh or cry at this comedy.
But next time, if the two wishes to be back to their normal self, I do hope neither are in a potential compromising situation, though I doubt you'll transfer them back to where they suppose to live, ie. like the first time you got Bingley in Longbourn and Lizzy at Netherfield.

more more please Malena

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

This is way too comical. Bingley, poor Bingley, I was afraid if he woke and found his true self he might be headed for the alter and bedlam at the same time.

Elizabeth has a little more sense. She is at least trying to figure out a way. Love that she slept between Fitz and the Darce, both dreaming of her. As I said way too comical.

Loved the chappie!!!

teb

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

The latest chapter reminds me yet again that you have a premise that is gold and you are mining it for all its mighty worth.

This was so deliciously funny--I rushed through it once and then went back to slowly savor the situations: Elizabeth realizes she does love Darcy, and in that instant, she is in her body and in his arms! But that cannot be--how would a virgin explain that--so, magically, she leaves her body again, and there before an amazed Colonel Fitzwilliam stands Bingley--who was a girl a minute ago.

Now that the colonel has seen, despite all the persuading Darcy tries to do, will his belief that Bingley had been for a brief moment, a girl, become a part of the plot going forward? Even if it lead to nothing more, it was a great scene. Oh, and your description of poor Bingley's predicament--including his up-close-and-personal moment with the woman who he wishes could be his mother-in-law. It was not the moment he wanted

This story is wonderful!

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

What fun... but too short! I simply cannot get enough of this story!

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Does this mean Elizabeth is going to change back to her female form eventually? That was fun having only the colonel be the witness. Loved it!

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

My money is on Lizzy figuring out how to transform back. How quickly can she get back to Longbourn?
Delightful chapter. Thank you very much
Geri

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Here you go, my dears, chapter 18 has just been posted!

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Malena, I love your story! The new chapters can not come quite quick enough! :)

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Thank you, Izabella. I hope I could write more often!

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Oh No! Not Jane and Collins, ugh. And the Colonel wants to prove his theory about Bingley. Great chapter. More please, irene

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

You spoiled us in Dec. I hope there's a new chapter coming soon.

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Me too! Actually, I check at least once a day. (hint, hint... PP as well)

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Everything is fine gals. Its only my beta is on a stand by mode. She doesnt think she can have time to check on my stories for...humphs indefinitely. So I am checking and double checking until i can safely say it is minimally correct. And no...no one else will do.

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

malena
Everything is fine gals. Its only my beta is on a stand by mode. She doesnt think she can have time to check on my stories for...humphs indefinitely. So I am checking and double checking until i can safely say it is minimally correct. And no...no one else will do.

Malena, we dont need perfection..just another post!

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Chapter 21 is up, my dears. Enjoy!

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

teasing, teasing Malena, and poor Lizzy...
I can't wait for the next chapter (maybe a meeting between E and D?)

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

All of a sudden after reading chapter 21, I remembered how angry I was at Darcy after reading the Ch where he was paying so much special attention to the Blond chick. And I got a flash, was he doing that because he was worried that he was starting to feel sexually atracted to Bing/Lizzy and it scare him? I believe his subconsious realize that Bing/Lizzy is LIzzy.

Your writting Malena is amazing.
Geri

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Thank you Geri,
You are absolutely right. Darcy must know, but his practical mind prevents him from acknowledging the whole thing. Proof after proof he simply rejects the idea because it is too preposterous, too fantastic.
Thanks for your insightful comment!

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

that chapter 21 was absolutely not enough Malena
but I'm glad the Jane will not be marrying Mr Collins and for Elizabeth quick thinking. I wonder if she suspect that poor Charles has been imprisoned, or is she only thinking of how to get back to her Darcy? This is the last swap, right, Malena?

Thank you, thank you Geri for that insight
Darcy rejection is better than plain blindness, it would also explain why he spend so much time with Charles, teaching him fencing, boxing

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Thankfully, Lizzy came up with a clever idea to stop the Collins/Jane nupitals.
Can't wait till we find out how Lizzy succeeds/fails with her attempt to contact her avoded betrothed.
More please, Irene

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Each chapter just makes me want more! I look forward to see how Elizabeth makes contact with Darcy. I am enjoying this fantasy. It's been fun, Malena!

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Chapter 22 is up, my dears. Enjoy!

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

I am so happy for another chapter of this fun story! I love Elizabeth's words about her beau and hope something will happen for her soon. Was the bouquet from Mr. Bingley? That was a good cliffhanger!

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

What a great chapter! I sure hope you won't make us wait as long as Lizzie for the next. She certainly is acting much like Marianne, eh? I hope Darcy doesn't pull a Willoughby move.

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Yes, Wendi. Totally taken from Marianne's woes. Though not so much tragical. Darcy is no Willoughby, LOL.
Glad you two enjoyed it, gals.Thanks for the comments. Next chapter perhaps you'll find a happy Fanny...I mean Elizabeth.

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

I do too think that card and flower are from Bingley, not Darcy. After all, why would Darcy send Elizabeth flower? Is he not in Kent? Actually, I'm not sure of the months, but will they go to Hunsford?

Malena, do come back soon, I love this story.

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Oh, there are so many questions. Lizzy sent the note to Darcy's house ofcourse but is Bingley still with his family? Is Bingley still drugged? Are the flowers from Darcy or Bingley?

Please post soon - I'm not sure I can stand being is suspense for long.

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Muahaha

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Enjoyed the chapter Malena.
Can't wait to find out who wrote the note and sent the flowers.

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Thank you, thank you! Im thrilled with the number of comments this chapter has inspired! I ll do my best to have a new chapter by the week end.

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Chapter 23 is up, dear friends. Enjoy!

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Malena, I have loved this story ever since you started to write it. It's hilarious (of course), so inventive and clever - and I really cannot wait to see how you resolve it! Bless the dear Colonel! He is adorable.

Nothing can be guaranteed to make one lol more than when reading your story!

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

As always, a wonderful chapter...though very mean of you to leave it there ;) I hope to see another soon! I love it that Col F is on her side! Thanks so much, Malena!

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Chapter 24 is up! Enjoy!

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Oh I do not like of trust Miss Richmond and I'm so angrY AT Darcy for even dancing or pay any attention at all on her.

I do believe that Fitzwilliam should take Miss Richmond, Miss Bennet and the Gardnier children home I'm sure that Darcy can handle and protect Lizzy and Georgie.

Oh I am looking forward to more
Geri

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

I have a feeling Darcy was a little unsettled about being attracted to a man--hence Miss Richmond!

Malena, thanks so much for another update so soon!!!

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Malena,

While reading your story I've hooted with laughter.
this is really great. I hope it finaly works out between Elisabeth and Darcy.

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

I am glad you are enjoying it.

Yes, I agree with the comment that Darcy must have felt drawn towards Miss Richmond due to his lost dignity after his unfathomable attraction towards Bingley. LOL.

Thank you all, dear friends for your encouragement. More Naughty Star soon.

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

I am totally in agreement w/Geri the Colonel needs to take Miss Bennet, the children, and Miss Richmond home, leaving Darcy, Georgiana, and Elizabeth drenched and headed for Darcy House.
At last our couple are together be it ever so wet, and I hope they will stay together.

I do feel sorry for Bingley being put under w/laudeman and everyone thinking he is crazy. What is to become of him? Will his sisters eventually be thankful that Jane will take him as a husband???

Great story, rich and funny Malena! I do hope when Darcy finds out he really was attracted to Elizabeth as a man he is able to cope.

Looking forward to more!

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

What an insightful comment teb. I will just say that there will be an addition to their party in the tea room. You'll soon see.

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Chapter 25 is up. The end is nearing, so enjoy it to the fullest.

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

Another truly wonderful chapter. So funny, so witty and so well written - I loved it.

Really enjoyed Jane's machinations (lol) and Darcy's picking up on them. Perfect.

I laughed out loud, snorted and generally had a fine time, so thank you!

Couple of favourite lines:

"Fitzwilliam raised his brows in approval. He felt very much inclined to assist Miss Elizabeth out of those wet clothes himself."

"Killing the sister would not help to ingratiate herself with the brother."

You are so funny!

Re: A Naughty Star by Malena

What a treat to find another chapter this morning! Once again, Malena, a great one. I have to agree with Splatt, you are very funny. I cannot help but love your stories. It is upsetting this is almost over, but I fully intend on going back and reading the whole thing from the beginning again as soon as it is.

Very interesting about the Colonel's attitude in this one. Hmmmm...

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