Dearest Ellen, enjoy your stay in Florida and have fun at the Magic Kingdom! This chapter is leading towards major angst, I fear. As much as I like the dear doctor, our hopefully soon-to-be well again Mr. Darcy should not have to compete for Lizzy's affection...or should he? You continue to weave your magic spell Ellen. I just love your stories and will eagerly await Chapter 6.
Chère Renée ! This was just in time for my mid-morning coffee !
So the good doctor passes to action ?
Of course, he should accompany the Misses Bennet when they return to Longburn... or is Mrs Bennet to come first to Netherfield ?
And Darcy - is already the seed of jealousy planted ?
Dear Ellen, I have to tell you that I read again from the beginning and I indeed appreciate enormously this idea of having another person at Netherfield. Indeed, not only the temporary disability of Darcy is influencing our characters, but also the presence of a stranger... And I find all their so influenced behaviours truly credible. And love it !
Already thinking of what the new chapter will delight us with !
Dear Ellen, I have to tell you that I read again from the beginning and I indeed appreciate enormously this idea of having another person at Netherfield. Indeed, not only the temporary disability of Darcy is influencing our characters, but also the presence of a stranger... And I find all their so influenced behaviours truly credible. And love it !
You've taken the words right out of my mouth, ma chère Mihaela. And it's so cleverly done. Love it, love it!
...and I was having my mid morning coffee as well! Kindred spirits, aren't we.
Thank you dearly for bestowing us another chapter. I had came here yesterday several times in hope to find chapter 5 , so I had to resign myself to read it today after getting home from a long and hard day.
Mr. Darcy is improving... too bad his tone was not the best when apologising. Hopefully he will warm up to the idea he has to be more humble and dear Lizzy is warming up to him as well.
Darcy having to hear the description of the hunting bout from the others must have been painful.
Oh my, now Darcy realized Mr. Hampton has indeed a deeper affection for Lizzy! Maybe this will prompt him to act sooner than expected and woo Elizabeth! I hope so :)
And I see Mr. Hampton is already preparing himself to act upon his intentions! This is gonna ge ninteresting
Thank you once again Ellen. Have a good week on Florida with your family!
OK, Ellen, this chapter totally gave me butterflies in my heart, yes heart, not belly!
Mr. Darcy is completely and utterly jealous.
I really love the way you have twisted it so Mr. Darcy is jealous and the Doctor thinks that he is in the clear and has nothing to fear from Mr. Darcy.
Ellen, I think Darcy is his own worst enemy. From his apology, ill temper in the Drawing room, to his discorse with Bingley. He is even more blind blind then he is when he can see.
My question is how will Dr.Hampton's suit be seen? Will it be welcomed or pushed to friendship only land. I have not discerned any tender tendencies from Elizabeth for him.
Oh ho, Darcy! Your words have painted you into a corner you had not forseen! LOL Ellen, you have crafted a curmudgeonly Darcy...he has shown little to appeal to a lady other than his physical beauty. He'd best start rethinking his manners and tone if he decides his interest in Elizabeth is more than out of mere curiosity.
I like the doctor...but Elizabeth seems to have shown no interest in him whatsoever. I'm eager to watch this unfold.
Ellen, I have always loved your stories but I believe this may turn out to be my favorite one yet. I love your Darcy and I like the good doctor too.
You know Darcy is just going to have to figure out that if not for his money he just might not have much to offer a lady. It kind of reminds me of what the spirit said to Ebenezer Scrooge in "The Christmas Carol".
Anyway Ellen I am truly enjoying this story and look forward to your updates.
My favourite line had to be: "Alarmed at the notion of being caught pouting, he sat up straighter in his chair and arranged his face into a more pleasant aspect"
The physical picture of this is just both touching and hilarious... a petulant Darcy, how wonderful!! LOL
I love that Jane noticed his interest in Lizzy - planting a seed already...
Though Darcy is blind, I must say he is still astute in his observations about the doctor's interest in Lizzy. Well, it's a good thing that Jane noticed his preference towards her sister, so hopefully she will help in some ways aiding Lizzy to favour towards Darcy .
Anyway great chapter again, i'm loving the competition betw these 2 men !!
""Do you know, Miss Bennet," Mr. Darcy began, "that when one cannot see, one's other senses are somewhat heightened?""
We already know that our beloved Darcy can HEAR better and SMELL better. When we are going to find out how about his other senses? Like TASTE and TOUCH.
What a great story!
Basia
This is such a great story line, very rarely does Darcy have some kind of incapacity, especially at the beginning of the story. I love that he is already feeling jealous of Mr. Hampton, it will do him good. But I truly hope that he recovers his sight or how else will he be able to appreciate Elizabeth's 'fine eyes?' Update soon!
This is such a cool story, thank you Ellen! I like the fact that Darcy is blind, a very original twist (although now my halfwit brain keeps bringing up images of Toby Stephens in Jane Eyre when I try to think of Darcy, a bit confusing but I think I'll manage, to me he's almost as lovable as MM or CF anyway:). And I love the fact that Darcy has competition (as long as he gets the girl in the end, at least). Anyway, just wanted to say thank you, keep up the superb work:)
I just began this lovely story. I cannot wait for more. I don't want Darcy uncomfortable, but whether he regains his sight or not, I think these two might do quite well together.
Dear all,
On behalf of my good friend I thank you all for your kind words. As many of you know, Ellen is away on holidays(or vacations as she would probably say)Still, she leaked out that she is already writing next chapter so that she can post it as soon as she returns. Keep writing these nice comments, they certainly help an author's imagination instantly grow.
Best regards from Ellen.
Eli
SUch an interesting turn of events! Of course the doctor would think Darcy wasn't interested in Elizabeth based on his comments about her older sister. I look forward to the possible rivalry and also to finding out more about the permanent extent of Darcy's injuries. Thanks for the very good chapter, Ellen.
Yes, I'm back, and Chapter 6 is almost done, with just a little polishing needed. I would say certainly within the next two days I'll be sending it off to Renee. Your patience will be rewarded.
Wow! That was a very sensual moment betw Darcy and Lizzy! You have written it so so well Ellen . But now that Mr Hampton has witnessed the scene, I can only hope that he's not the sort who will resort to sabotage his rival in getting what he wants.
Thank you Renée ! Indeed a great company for my mid-morning coffee !
Ellen, this was a wonderful chapter !
We are not yet privy of Darcy's thoughts after his interview with Miss Bennet - but it cannot be that bad ! he was in good spirits afterwards...
And after such poignant dreams, very bold indeed to ask to "see" her...
Lovely moment and so touching (pun unintented)... and very sensual ! And it was great to note Elizabeth's own reaction to his closeness and light touch.
As for him finding her "beautiful"... *swoon*
I can tell, dear Ellen, that I find your interpretation of the Netherfield library scene much more to my taste than JA's one ...
Now - how much EXACTLY did dr.Hampton see ? Only the good bye prolongued kiss ? I hope he didn't witness the 'seeing' moment. Not because I dread his interference, but because it was too beautiful to have it marred.
You were perfectly right ! No way this chapter could disappoint ! Loved it !
And now... I will indulge myself in some wild speculation...
Do we have to brace ourselves for the next chapter ? Enters Wickham ? Well, I hope dr Hampton does know a lot of Darcy to counter some of the venom...
Thank you... and well, I never said I would be content with only one chapter... so...please post soon... *wink*
It hardly ever happens to me when reading fanfiction, but I had to wipe a tear when reading how Darcy was exploring her face. It was incredibly poignant and beautiful.
Oh my, that was sexy! Is it awful of me to hope Dr. Hampton takes a long walk on a short pier? I don't want anything bad to happen to him, just for him to go away. I have a bad feeling he is going to interfere with Lizzy and Darcy because he has feelings for her.
Go, go Ellen. You are the best!!! I am dying for your Darcy. I confess HBK's Darcy is still lingering deep in my heart and the rest of my most inner emotions. That kiss at the N ball.Mmmmm Delightful experience. And their reunion at Longbourn....
Still, this Darcy is awakening motherly feelings in me...I suppose the same happens to Elizabeth...Though judging from her reaction at his touch I doubt she had such chaste sentiments in her...bosom.
Oh my! If that wasn't the most sensual moment I've read in a long time....it gave me shivers! Elizabeth, too! LOL Darn, Mr. Hampton witnessed it. He has a decided advantage over Darcy in his ability to read those important non-verbal signals that are such an important part of communication as well as his mobility. He can now go with Elizabeth while Darcy finds himself not yet prepared to leave the security of Netherfield.
Will Darcy ask Elizabeth to come read to him? Would that be appropriate? My regency etiquette has drawn a blank on that.
WoW!
I love this story.. I have never commented before on this website b/c my english skills are very far from good but this chapter made me delurk.
I have read a lot of JA fanfiction but this chapter was among the best I read in a long time: the "looking/touching" was a very beautiful moment.. although I wish the good doctor didnt witness it, but he unfortunately did.. something tells me he's going to spoil everything! :(
and btw, thank you very much Renée for this wonderful website and the time you take to make it such a nice virtual place to visit..
LiseT.
A very warm welcome to you LisaT! And thank you for your kind compliment. I'm doing my best to offer the authors the place they deserve and make it a pleasant environment to visit for all the fans.
And your English is excellent BTW, so don't worry about that!
I'd like to add my welcome to LiseT, and to second Renee's comment that if your first post is any indication of your skills in English, "No one admitted to the privilege of hearing you, can think any thing wanting."
And, Kate: This Darcy gives me goosebumps!
Me, too! It doesn't seem as if his lack of eyesight is any great hindrance to our all falling in love with him! Now if only Elizabeth felt the same way...
I have just found this story and have caught up with it! It is always a treat when I read one of your stories! They are well written and very entertaining! I am so glad to see a new one so soon after HBK!
I kept telling myself that the best way for Darcy to "see" Lizzy was through his hands and boy you did not disappoint when you came to that scene! I am not sure what I think about the Doctor, but I hope that Lizzy can avoid any misunderstandings when it comes to Darcy. They have already avoided the blunder at the assembly since Darcy wasn't there to make it, but I think his injury has humbled him a bit! Let's just hope other people don't come in and cause things to go astray!
May I borrow Rita's fainting smiley? "Oh my" is right! Hopefully, the library moment will put an end to Darcy's nightmares, since I imagine he will have plenty to distress him while he's awake. Let me just say that I'm going to read chapter 6 again (and maybe some of the previous chapters, too) as soon as I finish this post! That was beautiful, Ellen.
That touching/seeing scene was marvelous! At the very least Darcy has given Lizzy something to think about--on top of her clearer understanding of the trials that made him seem so petulant on first acquaintance. This was her first erotic experience I think, and one that the relatively elderly Doctor will not be able to match, for all his congeniality. I'm somewhat disappointed that he's immediately thinking competitively--about what he needs to do to beat Darcy at his 'game'--for him Lizzy seems a prize, whereas Darcy may already realize that to him she's essential.
I'm somewhat disappointed that he's immediately thinking competitively--about what he needs to do to beat Darcy at his 'game'--for him Lizzy seems a prize, whereas Darcy may already realize that to him she's essential.
Ah, but what if the good doctor finds something essential about Lizzy as well? We know her to be a very desirable potential mate. Why should Mr. Hampton not press his advantage, if he has honorable intentions? He's not getting any younger, you know!