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A Naughty Star by Malena

My dears, Mrs Darcy has a lovely surprise for you. Chapter 1 of Malena's hilarious "A Naughty Star" has just been posted on her pages. Enjoy, and don't forget to give her some love!

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Talk about body swap. This looks to be to humorous a story.

teb

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Can't wait for more!

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OMG!! This is so good!!! I'm trying to contain the tears from laughing so hard!!!

Thank you!!

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Awesome twist !

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"Bingley. This is ridiculous. You have seen me naked more often than I have seen your sister wearing a decent colour in her gown."

Very funny, and the situation is rife with possibility. Not an exchange of bodies between Darcy and Elizabeth, but a four-way switch that puts the hapless Bingley and Jane somewhere in the lurch? Where are they in all this? I think that's Elizabeth in Bingley's body, and Darcy still in his own, right?

Ahem, but you do have another story you are writing, do you not, my dear Malena? Even while I praise the first chapter of this, allow me to voice my hope you will not leave an older offspring of yours orphaned as a WIP wandering in the wilderness.

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ooh my this is very promising premises... so i'll take it Bingley is in Elizabeth's body? hahahaa i can just imagine the hilarity...so 'Elizabeth' is going to follow & mesmerized by Jane, while all of sudden 'Bingley' is avoiding & hating Darcy ? I truly hope Darcy will be the one 'in-the-know' and when everyone learned their lesson they will return to their real body.

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I can't wait for the next chapter were Bingley/Elizabeth wakes in Jane’s bed and starts kissing on her. LOL

As for Elizabeth/Bingley getting an eye shot of our dearest Darcy I'm jealous. How long for the effected parties to realize what has happened. Love the concept here and want more.
Geri

P.S. don’t forget about the Parson!

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Very nice!

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Sorry girls for not sending PP on time. The truth is...that about a month ago I was caught with a horrible flu that kept me in bed unable to eat, read or even watch TV. The only thing I could do was think. And thinking along I got to write this story in my mind(my head ache was such I could not even force myself to open the laptop)I HAD TO PUT IT IN BLACK AND WHITE BEFORE IT WENT OFF MY MIND!!!

Well. It is done and I am glad you like it. Chapter 2 is on its way next week, and you can expect more pleasures for our dear parson by Sunday...
kiss and hug
Male

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OMG... this is just hillarious! I cannot wait to read more!

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I haven't read the beginning yet, but I wondered if posting it means that Parson story is being put on hold?

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Whoops! Just read Malena's comment that Parson will be back on Sunday. How fitting.

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OOOHHH!!!!


I can't wait to read this!! What will Charles do when he wakes up next to Jane? What will JANE do!!!

Will Lizzy tell Darcy what's going on and what will she be tempted to do to Caroline....muhahahaha


So excited!!!

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Great beginning, Malena! So funny and so interesting. What is happening to Charles?????

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My lovely Malena, I'm so utterly and completely enraptured by this comedy. I had a huge smile on my face from the first to the last sentence... Your sense of humour and delightful imagination just cannot leave anybody untouched, not even the greatest grouch!

Thank you for sharing this gem with us. sweetie.

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Sigh, hooked again. Malena, you are inspired!

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Very entertaining! Initially I thought Bingley may have gotten the better of the deal (Sharing a bed with Jane & all) but then again he’s got Mrs. Bennet & Lydia to deal with!

Will Lizzy change her mind now that she’s really seen Mr. Darcy!

Can’t wait for more.

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It seems I am not the only one. Another author is doing the honour of being preparing a story with a similar theme! It seems she is very good at naughty bits. I just cant wait to read that!!! What can I say? I have a thing for Darcy, wet and short of clothes!

Thanks to all, including the lovely Ruth O, for all the praise. I will do my best to render one chapter a week. Tis so easy when one is inspired! And there are sooooo many possibilities!!!!

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Boy oh boy, what a teaser.
This looks like it's going to be lots of fun.

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OMG ... This could possibly be my favorite P&P fanfic EVER. The possibilities are endless. Elizabeth sending Caroline off to god knows where, Bingley sharing a room with Jane, Bingley dealing with Mrs. Bennett, Elizabeth watching Darcy moon over Bingley ... maybe Bingley will even embroider a cushion! Hahahahahahahaha!

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My dears, chapter 2 and 3 have just been posted on Malenás pages. Enjoy!

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Will Charles/Lizzy still be when they wake up after being drugged? I hope we find out about Lizzy/Charles at Longbourne.This is halarious

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Hilarious, hilarious, hilarious!!! This is great. I wonder what is becoming of Bingley in Elizabeth's body and Jane. Can't wait for Darce to find out it really is Elizabeth. Excellent chapter. Can't wait for more.

teb

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A naughty star laughed. Oh dear how long will this go on?

Will Bingley/Lizzy be faring as well as Lizzy/Bingley?

This is too cute

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I could not stop laughing, and I am wondering what will come of the two of them? BTW... what is going on with Elizabeth's body? That is an interesting question considering HIS lady love is her sister! Can't wait for more!

Sara

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I like. I really enjoy. Hope there is more to come. FUNNY stuff.

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This should have come with a warning--you may laugh so hard you choke.

I know it takes awhile to turn chapters out but would that the same naughty star which did the switch now somehow put the next chapters immediately in our hands like magic.

I'm dying to see "Bingley" with Jane at Longbourn but I also want more Darcy with the "man" he thinks is Bingley. Darcy's reactions to the female spirit within are probably enough to make him question his most cherished ideas about himself. And speaking of cherished, I especially liked this phrase, "his enormous feet." Yeah.

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Thank you all for the feedback. It is very important to us writers, since this is our only reward.
I confess I laugh a lot while writing this story, and many times laugh at the mere idea of what I will write the next day.
The theme is in itself very amusing. The difficult part, as one of you pointed out is to put it in black and white.
Well, I shall start chapter four now...and you can expect the scenes to be focused on Longbourn and Miss Elizabeth/Bingley.

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Malena, this is the best laugh I have had all week. Elizabeth & the laudanam is such a funny combination. I cannot wait to see how Charles reacts when he wakes up looking like ELizabeth!

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that is just precious, and should have come with a no-drinking warning..I was laughing so hard I almost fell from my chair
..poor Darcy...now he is very very confused about his ehm....attraction to Bingley.....i wonder if the will ever return them to their real bodies...because even if Darcy managed to find a way to marry 'Bingley'...Jane cant possibly marry her 'sister' . cant wait to read when 'Lizzy' see naked Jane...sisters will be more touchy and there will be less boundary than 2 male friends

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This is absolutely hilarious Malena!!!

What a clever swap, and to have Elizabeth/Bingley oggling off Darcy is just too funny!!

Thank you for this and PP, can't wait for further updates!!

Sue

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Oh, you have really put a new twist on Elizabeth & Darcy, Charles & Jane! To now know each other's secrets and the inter-workings of what is talked about each other, is to funny! Lizzy acting very foward and then Darcy going along with the banter until it reminded him of "Elizabeth Bennet"! To funny! Now Charles will hear how Jane feels about him and see the true Jane! Can't wait to read the next chapters.....

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I really love Elizabeth when she "gets high", she is hilarious ! Poor Darcy suddenly attracted to his best friend is pretty funny too. Darcy is so patient with "Bingley", he is a true mother hen !
Usually, I don't care about Jane and Bingley, but I can't wait to see what's going on back at Longbourn !

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Neither do I care for them. But this case is different, since Bingley is Lizzy.I have been writing chapter 4 and believe me...can hardly contain my glee. O my! It will be very difficult to concentrate on PP now!!!

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This is too funny! MUST HAVE MORE!

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My sides are hurting from laughing so hard. Poor Darcy!

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Glad to hear that,Ruth! Eagerly waiting for yourversion, must say.

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I LOVE THIS STORY!The possibilities of this story are endless!!! Really funny! Can't wait for the next chapter!!!!!

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Thanks Fifi.I am having a lot of fun writing it too. Bingley and Jane's chapter is taking me a little longer than expected, for I do not want to miss any possible situation that can bring up a good laugh. Be patient. My beta and I are working together at this.

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Malena I find myself having to comment again while we wait for the next chapter. I have said several times how I can hardly wait to see what is happening at Longbourn with Lizzy/Bingley.

However as I read Lucy comment: “I cannot wait to see how Charles reacts when he wakes up looking like Elizabeth!”

After Bingley finally realize something isn’t right when Jane keeps calling him Lizzy (which I imagine will take a while.) I envision innocent (which is what I always see him as) Bingley standing in front of a full length mirror in his Shift and Stays lustfully running his hands down his/Lizzy ample curve-a-tious breasts down her waist over her hips and down to her center core. His eyes flutter as he passes out and crashes to the floor. LOL

Malena please hurry I really want more.

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This is absolutely hilarious and very cute!! Thank you and cant wait to see what happens next!

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I envision innocent (which is what I always see him as) Bingley standing in front of a full length mirror in his Shift and Stays lustfully running his hands down his/Lizzy ample curve-a-tious breasts down her waist over her hips and down to her center core. His eyes flutter as he passes out and crashes to the floor.
LOL!!!!
SmileyCentral.com
Though I must confess Mr Bingley's reaction in the story will be sth like...SmileyCentral.com
Plus he will be subjected to quite unexpected treatment from the part of his new sisters and his beau... The chapter is in the expert hands of my beta now. As soon as she finds time to have a look at it, it will be posted. But since she is struggling to get time to write her own story, you must be patient.
Thans for the idea Geri...and to you Lice, for taking time to comment. It is very flattering to see how many people feel like leaving their thoughts on this one. It certainly spurs me to keep writing...

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Laugh along, ladies and gents, with chapter 4 of Malena's hilarious "A Naughty Star".

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"They were thinking of different mice, you know"
[ This keeps getting better and better.

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I nearly fell over laughung, at Bingley's 'missing manly parts', and how he reacted to Jane. I wonder that E doesn't figure out what happened sooner? Perhaps Bingley is more intelligent than we origionally thought? Thanks again! Hope to see another post soon!

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Bingley with Jane at Longbourn did not disappoint--it was as funny as Elizabeth with Darcy Netherfield. I was a bit scandalized to find out that "Elizabeth" had been, apparently, fondling her sister all night as they slept in bed--Bingley of course thinking he was dreaming. But wasn't Jane a wee bit surprised at Elizabeth's intimate touching?

Reading on, I realized we cannot be sure of how intimate the touching was--maybe just a combination of not-so-scandalous reality and hyper fantasy on the part of the sleeping Bingley? Whatever it was, Jane apparently did not feel it was untoward, so I guess no foul, all fair.

Bingley realizing that he had "lost" something, too funny! Although you characterize him as not a bright guy, he was smart enough to figure our that his wish upon a star was at fault and he suspects (correctly?) that it will be temporary. But first, more hijinks, please!

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I wonder that E doesn't figure out what happened sooner? Perhaps Bingley is more intelligent than we origionally thought?
Bingley is more naive than Elizabeth. He is a kind of free spirit, boyish if you want...hence more prone to believe the unbelievable...like a child. If you told Bingley that you have seen an angel, he would probably look up at the sky.
Elizabeth on her part has her feet on the ground, so it is more difficult for her to believe in the supernatural. She was trying to find a reasonable explanation to what was happening to her.

I was a bit scandalized to find out that "Elizabeth" had been, apparently, fondling her sister all night as they slept in bed
So was I ...was not sure whether the scene would bother anyone...but as you put it, we will never know the extent of Bingley's real activities amidst the sheets... Jane is too good even to realise what was going on...Also she was sleeping all the time.
But Bingley is a gentleman...I am sure he will not repeat the yielding of favours while in Elizabeth's skin.

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Love the missing mice. This chapter was so so funny, Malena! Lizzy at Longbourn should be very amusing. Looking forward to it!

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oh my, what an amazing story it is
love it

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hahaha ...you woke up the whole Bennets household to look for Bingley's balls a.k.a mice ...i almost died laughing when someone (was that Lydia?) said.."Mice? You mean two? Lord!" ... so whats next a private meeting between "Bingley"& "Lizzy" imagine the jealous/outrage reactions they will be getting

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